#2_Diary 20190710

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abcde   : 스펠링 잘못된 부분

 

2010710

I think I'm a lucky person.

I can see amazing sunset everyday, feel the rainy day's mood,

and I can drink 술 when I want (내가 '원할때' 내가 '먹고싶은' 술을 먹을 수 있다..라고 하고싶은데ㅠㅠ)

-> I can drink whenever I want.

 

Now I'm thirty but everything dosen't change.

I think thirty is way better than 20's.

I know what I want to be, what I like, what's good for me. (people, make-up etc..)

 

I have believed I'm creative and sociability person, 

-> I'm creative and sociable person, (or I'm good with sociability.)

 

but I realized I'm kind of systematic and... little shy for strangers!?

-> but I realized I'm kind of organized and little shy for strangers.

 

l like people who I feel comfortable.

 

I think i've to fix this bad thing.ㅠㅠ

-> I think I have to fix (I have to는 줄여쓰지 않는다.)

 

There is a lot of things to know myself,

-> There are a lot of~

 

but I mostly satisfy shape of now.

-> but I mostly satisfied with myself now.

 

I try to grownup better than mypresentself.

-> I try to grow up / I try to be grown up better than mypresentself.

 

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# Point

- 어렵게 쓰지 않아도 쉽게 표현할 수 있음

- 수동태 사용하는 부분 주의하자

- 단어에 대한 이해 필요 (사전의 예문 많이 보기!)

- and.. 굳이 고칠 필요 없는 성격인 것 같기도 하다?ㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋ